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Re: Do You?
I enjoyed it :P I am a bit tired so I may not give the best advice and will look over this in the morning for a second read. I ...
Nov 29, 2008 -
Re: Howzit!
Haha, i thought it was a really short poem I was about to review. I came up with the suggestion to remove " and so unnecessary" to make cruel and ...
Oct 20, 2008 -
Re: Who am I?
It is much better than you think. For some reason or another it flows pretty well and is a bit catchy. Who am I? This is the question I am ...
Oct 20, 2008 -
Re: Danger like you.
You are danger you break everything in sight. This is a great opening line to start a poem and I really like it. However, you are missing something in between ...
Oct 20, 2008 -
Re: I Am
Just to point one thing out, you need too reviews before posting work. Alright, now or a quick few suggestions. 1) I understand you are going for a bold statement, ...
Oct 20, 2008 -
Re: Goddess of Seduction
Grammar Fixes and Such Your skin is soft supple and y outhful . Y ou must have been sent upon wings of a dove ; For you resemble Aphrodite the ...
Oct 18, 2008 -
Re: Gone
Bravo. :D Now that was a great poem that flowed extremely well and I really enjoyed it. I truly liked that a lot. I don't really have any things for ...
Jul 17, 2008 -
Re: Yellow
I like this better than your other poem to be honest. It makes much more sense and is better written. The first line is great and is a wonderful line ...
Jul 17, 2008 -
Re: Fall
First off, let me say that I can tell you are creative and a good writer from reading that. However, I don't think that poem worked for you and came ...
Jul 17, 2008 -
Re: "I am a person too"
Your message is great, and their is no denying that. Good job on writing a meaningful message. As for your poem, it is good for what it is. It is ...
Jul 2, 2008 -
Re: Where Did It Go?
I like it and it flows quite nice. I like the shortness and it is creative. However, the line Inspiration is gone. seems a bit too long syllable rise and ...
Jun 19, 2008
